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Jul05
on July 5, 2017
and modified on July 5, 2017.
Story: Act 1 - Ignition
Characters: Aaron Fairchilde, Fernidad
Yeah, there’s some history here.
Mastery
Act 1 – Ignition
Yeah, there’s some history here.
Ha! Aaron is so cute in these panels.
I love the world expansion on this page. The size changing and the obvious history between these two.
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Omg, that third panel is gold! xD
I have no idea how big he’s supposed to be in panel 2. The camera positioning gives me no perspective. How far away is he standing? Panel 3 implies he’s almost up to the doorframe, but again I’m not sure where’s he’s standing in relation to other objects in the scene.
Perfect is the enemy of good, but unless you’re deliberately trying to obscure his size then please redraw these two panels when you make a print edition.
I hope there’s a print edition, I’m enjoying the comic so far.
Oh, he’s at the base of the stairs with the forward leg higher up the stoop. I’ll definitely keep that in mind and there’ll definitely be a print version down the line. This page in general needs a lot of background work, as does the page where Sarah’s powers finally activate for the first time. The last panel on that page pains me.
Anytime you see things that are confusing, definitely let me know. It’s just Ari and I doing proofing on these and usually that’s a few minutes before I have to upload for posting. Those critiques are really appreciated.
Hmm. I can’t get any of that from the picture. Is this an interior shot, where Fairchilde has entered a corridor to get in the apartment? Are there only twp stairs, or his he a giant like Diane from Seven Deadly Sins? None of the shapes are recognizable.
The only information I can get from this picture: Fairchilde outside an apartment, and he’s a bit of a dick, assuming I’m reading his body language correctly.